Topic:

Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution, and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations.

Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily.

Do you agree or disagree?

Essay:

Over recent years there has been an enormous increase in the amount of air traffic around the world resulting in various problems, and a major cause of this has been the growth of low- cost low-cost [Possible Typo; This word seems to be formatted incorrectly. Consider fixing the spacing or removing the hyphen completely.] airlines. Although some people believe that taxes should be increased for air travel, this is not the best solution.

Those that support taxing airlines believe that this will result in a reduction in this type of travel and thus solve the problems of pollution, noise and construction. This is because a tax would make the cost of travelling more expensive, which will, they claim, lead to a decrease in demand. Proponents of this solution believe that taxes are fair because everyone has to pay them and , and [Punctuation Error; Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).; Checkout This Link] it is a workable solution that will have the additional bonus of providing an income for the government.

However, there are a number of reasons why this is not the right course of action. Firstly, a tax is not fair because it will adversely affect people on lower incomes. Such a tax would have to be a fixed amount paid equally whether you are rich or poor, which means that those on lower incomes would find it more difficult to travel, but it would likely have little effect on the lives of those with a higher income. In addition, such a tax would not work. For example, we have seen taxes increase in most countries on cars, but this has had little effect, with car use continuing to grow.

To sum up, it is evident that introducing heavy taxes on air travel is not fair or workable. If we continue to explore alternatives, we can continue to enjoy the benefits that air travel offers.

7.0
Overall Band Score
7.5 - Coherence and Cohesion
6.5 - Lexical Resource
7.0 - Task Response
7.0 - Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Coherence Cohersion Feedback - 7.5
Using IELTS grading criteria.

- ✔️Variety of cohesive devices used
- ✔️Referencing and substitution used
- ✔️Ideas logically sequenced
- ✔️All paragraphs have central topic
- ✔️Essay has clear flow
- ✔️Proper Paragraphing
- ✔️Paragraph Count
Lexical Resource Feedback - 6.5
Using IELTS grading criteria.

- ✔️Complex phrasing used correctly
- ✔️Variety of words used to prevent repetition
- ✔️Spelling and word formation used correctly
- ✔️Formal language used
- 🟡 Collocation (which verb match which noun) used correctly
There are instances where collocations could be improved. For example, 'a reduction in this type of travel' could be better expressed as 'a decrease in this mode of transportation.' To enhance the use of collocations, the student should focus on using more precise and commonly used combinations of words.
- 🟡 The vocabulary used is precise and expressive and fit the topic
While the student's vocabulary generally fits the topic, there are areas where more precise and expressive vocabulary could be used. For instance, instead of 'problems of pollution, noise, and construction,' the student could use 'issues of pollution, noise, and infrastructure development.' To improve vocabulary precision, the student should explore synonyms and more specific terms related to the topic.
Grammatical Range Accuracy Feedback - 7.0
Using IELTS grading criteria.

- ✔️Used appropriate grammar tenses
- ✔️Used punctuation accurately
- ✔️Major grammatical Errors are avoided
- 🟡 Variety of sentence structures, including simple, compound, and complex sentences used
The essay predominantly consists of simple sentences, with limited use of compound and complex structures. To enhance the essay's readability and sophistication, incorporating a mix of sentence structures would be beneficial. For instance, in the sentence 'Firstly, a tax is not fair because it will adversely affect people on lower incomes.', adding a complex sentence after the introductory phrase would improve the overall structure.
- 🟡 Sentence structures are used appropriately
The essay lacks variety in sentence structures. Most sentences are simple and straightforward, lacking complexity and sophistication. For example, 'Those that support taxing airlines believe that this will result in a reduction in this type of travel and thus solve the problems of pollution, noise and construction.' could be improved by incorporating complex sentences for better flow and coherence.
Detailed Feedback and Analysis
Sentence: Over recent years there has been an enormous increase in the amount of air traffic around the world resulting in various problems, and a major cause of this has been the growth of low- cost airlines.
Error Type: Coherence and Cohesion
Error: Lack of clear transition between ideas
Correction: Add a transition word such as "Moreover" at the beginning of the sentence to improve coherence.
Explanation: Adding transition words helps to connect ideas more effectively and improve the flow of the essay.

Sentence: Those that support taxing airlines believe that this will result in a reduction in this type of travel and thus solve the problems of pollution, noise and construction.
Error Type: Lexical Resource
Error: Repetition of "this"
Correction: Replace one instance of "this" with "air travel" for clarity.
Explanation: Avoiding repetition enhances the lexical variety and clarity of the essay.

Sentence: Firstly, a tax is not fair because it will adversely affect people on lower incomes.
Error Type: Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Error: Incorrect use of adverb "Firstly"
Correction: Use "First" instead of "Firstly".
Explanation: Using "First" instead of "Firstly" is more appropriate for academic writing.

Sentence: Such a tax would have to be a fixed amount paid equally whether you are rich or poor, which means that those on lower incomes would find it more difficult to travel, but it would likely have little effect on the lives of those with a higher income.
Error Type: Task Response
Error: Lack of specific examples or evidence to support arguments
Correction: Provide examples or statistics to illustrate how taxes may impact different income groups differently.
Explanation: Providing concrete examples strengthens your argument and supports your stance effectively.