Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution, and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations.
Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily.
Do you agree or disagree?
Over recent years there has been an enormous increase in the amount of air traffic around the world resulting in various problems, and a major cause of this has been the growth of low- cost low-cost [Possible Typo; This word seems to be formatted incorrectly. Consider fixing the spacing or removing the hyphen completely.] airlines. Although some people believe that taxes should be increased for air travel, this is not the best solution.
Those that support taxing airlines believe that this will result in a reduction in this type of travel and thus solve the problems of pollution, noise and construction. This is because a tax would make the cost of travelling more expensive, which will, they claim, lead to a decrease in demand. Proponents of this solution believe that taxes are fair because everyone has to pay them and , and [Punctuation Error; Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).; Checkout This Link] it is a workable solution that will have the additional bonus of providing an income for the government.
However, there are a number of reasons why this is not the right course of action. Firstly, a tax is not fair because it will adversely affect people on lower incomes. Such a tax would have to be a fixed amount paid equally whether you are rich or poor, which means that those on lower incomes would find it more difficult to travel, but it would likely have little effect on the lives of those with a higher income. In addition, such a tax would not work. For example, we have seen taxes increase in most countries on cars, but this has had little effect, with car use continuing to grow.
To sum up, it is evident that introducing heavy taxes on air travel is not fair or workable. If we continue to explore alternatives, we can continue to enjoy the benefits that air travel offers.
Overall Band Score
6.5 - Lexical Resource
7.0 - Task Response
7.0 - Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Coherence Cohersion Feedback - 7.5
Lexical Resource Feedback - 6.5
Grammatical Range Accuracy Feedback - 7.0
Detailed Feedback and Analysis
Error Type: Coherence and Cohesion
Error: Lack of clear transition between ideas
Correction: Add a transition word such as "Moreover" at the beginning of the sentence to improve coherence.
Explanation: Adding transition words helps to connect ideas more effectively and improve the flow of the essay.
Sentence: Those that support taxing airlines believe that this will result in a reduction in this type of travel and thus solve the problems of pollution, noise and construction.
Error Type: Lexical Resource
Error: Repetition of "this"
Correction: Replace one instance of "this" with "air travel" for clarity.
Explanation: Avoiding repetition enhances the lexical variety and clarity of the essay.
Sentence: Firstly, a tax is not fair because it will adversely affect people on lower incomes.
Error Type: Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Error: Incorrect use of adverb "Firstly"
Correction: Use "First" instead of "Firstly".
Explanation: Using "First" instead of "Firstly" is more appropriate for academic writing.
Sentence: Such a tax would have to be a fixed amount paid equally whether you are rich or poor, which means that those on lower incomes would find it more difficult to travel, but it would likely have little effect on the lives of those with a higher income.
Error Type: Task Response
Error: Lack of specific examples or evidence to support arguments
Correction: Provide examples or statistics to illustrate how taxes may impact different income groups differently.
Explanation: Providing concrete examples strengthens your argument and supports your stance effectively.